ok well, I am trying to correct my mom's makeup coursework. it's for a project. but neither is my mom nor am i good in english. our grammar is very bad. so can you please correct the 3 little pragraphs below. THANKS!!!!! make any changes you feel will make it much better!
PHOTOGRAPHY BY NATHANIEL GOLDBERG
Goldberg鈥檚 photography is really clear. The models with the horse and the dogs look like they are walking on streets. The colors and shades are also very clear and attractive. Greenery of the grass and the rich air makes you feel timeless. The make-up is clear and fresh. I love his photography, not because I love nature but because his work is really strong and beautiful.
PHOTOGRAPHY BY CAMILLA AKRANS
These three photographs are absolutely stunning 鈥?the colors are so rich and lush. The use of geometrical backgrounds is extremely creative. The use of light, colors, and materials and how the images are constructed all work to complement the clothing and model. I love how the use of materials and lights create different effects that work with the model, clothing and scenery. You can notice the use of lighting mostly in picture two as there is a black shadow behind her as well as her normal shadow. I think the second picture is stunning.
PHOTOGRAPHY BY SOLVE SUNDSBO
These three pictures describes the fall season perfectly. The make-up is very clear. The model wearing fur/silver heels is also very clear. Everything in these pictures is so balanced out. The second photograph captures the colors very nicely. The third photograph is rich of elegance because the net on top of the dress is really unique. Your English is almost perfect, but -- "really" should not be used when you mean "very."
I put parenthesis around some unnecessary words and around some words that should be substituted or inserted in your text. I think you will see what I mean.
PHOTOGRAPHY BY NATHANIEL GOLDBERG
Goldberg鈥檚 photography is really (VERY) clear. The models with the horse and the dogs look like they are walking on streets. The colors and shades are also very clear and attractive. (THE) greenery of the grass and the rich air makes you feel timeless. The make-up is clear and fresh. I love his photography, not because I love nature but because his work is really strong and beautiful.
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PHOTOGRAPHY BY CAMILLA AKRANS
These three photographs are absolutely stunning 鈥?the colors are (so) rich and lush. The use of geometrical backgrounds is extremely creative. The use of light, colors, and materials and how (THE WAY) the images are constructed all work to complement the clothing and model. I love how the use of materials and lights create different effects that work with the model, clothing and scenery. You can notice the use of lighting mostly in picture two as there is a black shadow behind her as well as her normal shadow. I think the second picture is stunning.
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PHOTOGRAPHY BY SOLVE SUNDSBO
These three pictures describes the fall season perfectly. The make-up is very clear. The model wearing fur/silver heels is also very clear. Everything in these pictures is (so) balanced out. The second photograph captures the colors very nicely. The third photograph is rich of elegance (RICHLY ELEGANT) because the net on top of the dress is (VERY) really unique. PHOTOGRAPHY BY NATHANIEL GOLDBERG
Goldberg鈥檚 photography is quite clear. The models including the horse and dogs look like attractive as they walk down the street. The colors and shades are very clear and eye-catching. Serenity of natures life and the rich air makes you feel sensational. The make-up is clear and fresh. I love his photography, not only because I am passionate about nature and it's beauties but because his work represents the person that I want to become; strong, confident, and beautiful.
PHOTOGRAPHY BY CAMILLA AKRANS
These three photographs are absolutely stunning 鈥?the colors are so rich and lush. The use of geometrical backgrounds is extremely creative. The use of light, colors, and materials and how the images are constructed all work to complement the clothing and model. I love how the use of materials and lights create different effects that work with the model, clothing and scenery. You can notice the use of lighting mostly in picture two as there is a black shadow behind her as well as her normal shadow. I think the second picture is stunning.
PHOTOGRAPHY BY SOLVE SUNDSBO
These three pictures describe the fall season perfectly. The make-up is very clear. The model wearing fur/silver heels is also very clear. Everything in these pictures is so balanced out. The second photograph captures the colors very nicely. The third photograph is rich of elegance because the net on top of the dress is really unique. You know, people pay money for this service. Goldberg鈥檚 photography is quite clear. The models including the horse and dogs look like attractive as they walk down the street. The colors and shades are very clear and eye-catching. Serenity of natures life and the rich air makes you feel sensational. The make-up is clear and fresh. I love his photography, not only because I am passionate about nature and it's beauties but because his work represents the person that I want to become; strong, confident, and beautiful. You know, I think they all sound great. The only thing I see wrong is in the third paragraph it should say: These three pictures describe not describes. okay The use of geometrical backgrounds are extremely creative.
The use of light, colors, and materials show how the images are constructed. All work to complement the clothing and the model. You can notice the use of lighting more in picture two. There is a black shadow behind her as well as her normal shadow. there don't appear to be too many problems with grammar in what you've provided.
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I don't know the photo so perhaps it should be 'waling on the street'? The "lush greenery of the grass" might be better and 'makes time seem to stand still' might be better than 'makes you feel timeless.'
paragraph 3 -
'rich of elegance' could be removed. "The third photograph is very elegant" would be be better.
other than the above - which really aren't necessarily grammatical errors as such it looks OK. well done. Goldberg鈥檚 photography is very clear. The horse and dog models look like they are walking on streets. The grass's greenery and the rich air makes you feel timeless. The make-up is clear and fresh. I love his photography not because I love nature, but because his work is strong and beautiful.
PHOTOGRAPHY BY CAMILLA AKRANS
These three photographs are absolutely stunning because the colors are so rich and lush. The use of geometrical backgrounds is extremely creative. The use of light, colors, materials, and how the images are constructed all work to compliment the clothing and model. I love how the use of materials and lights create different effects that work with the model, clothing, and scenery. You can notice the use of lighting mostly in picture two, as there is a black shadow behind her as well as her normal shadow. I think the second picture is stunning.
PHOTOGRAPHY BY SOLVE SUNDSBO
These three pictures describe the fall season perfectly. The make-up is very clear. The model wearing fur and silver heels is also very clear. Everything in these pictures are so balanced out. The second photograph captures the colors very nicely. The third photograph is rich in elegance because the net on top of the dress is very unique.
Hope this helped. I'm pretty good at grammar, but maybe you should wait for a 2nd opinion? Or try spell checking on Microsoft Word? Good luck on your project. Well there are a couple of small errors, but really the paragraphs are very clear. You should have more confidence in your English. It is perfectly acceptable. In the last paragraph, it should be, "these three pictures describe ..." I would edit the last sentence because it is not idiomatic in English to say, "the photograph is rich of elegance:" Just say the elegant photograph. In the first paragraph "greenery of the grass" doesn't make sense in English, although I rather like it as an expressive phrase. I am not sure I would change it, but it would be something like, "the rich colors of green grass and translucent air ..." But then I am interpreting. Really, I would leave it alone. The English is really very good. 2nd paragraph:
Change 2nd sentence to "The use of geometrical backgrounds ARE extremely creative."
I'd rewrite the 3rd sentence to "The construction of the images with the use of light, colors, and materials all work to complement the clothing as well as the model."
3rd paragraph:
There shouldn't be an "s" in describe because you're subject is plural.
Hope this helps! :) | 