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*** Could someone pls edit my essay ***? |
Pls give me comment, suggestion鈥tc Where do I need to improve? Essay Question: http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=... Marking Criteria: http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=... My Essay (p.1) http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=... My Essay (p.2) http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=... My Essay (p.3) http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=... Thanks n Love u all :x Hmmm - - -not as frightening as I was dreading - - - actually the opening flows nicely. Mostly the flow of words, the elimination of excess words, the use of commas in place of periods, those sort of things. But the arguments ring clear and you clearly have been educated . Gonna cut & paste a few of your pages to give you an edited version. "" Equilitarism is a moral principal, the belief that all people should be equal. This does not amount to an ethical system for it has no standard of value simply the belief that all value should be distributed equally. This essay argues that to an enormous extent that notion of equilatarism reflect Australian Society today. This essay will adresss the issue of inequality in ancient times based upon Race, Gender and Sexual Indentity discussing the patterns & consequences of discrimination against four groups in Austrailia. The harsh unfair treatment of the Aboriginals, the migration of Asian groups, the status of women in society and discrimination of Homosexuals." Anyhow Peace. |
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